Kia+Banks

9/15

New york city has become known as one of the most devestating grounds to walk on ever since September 11,2001. Even though 9 years have passed it is still a tender situation to bring up to modern New yorkians. On top of the heart curtling situation the same people that were alleged to have bombed ground zero are still trying to make it their buisness to come back into the lives of people that fell death to 9/11. A new mosque is in the works of being blueprinted right on the grounds of ground zero, it is hard to have to stand there and watch someone that you dispise be able to make your world come crashing down all over again. Even thought it is a free country im not sure it is ok for people to try and damage the soul of other hurting from this situation.


 * P= You did a nice job of setting up your thoughts by explaining the situation**
 * C= Some strange choice of words, "curtling"?? You have to explain the implications of the mosque. You say, "even though it is a free country..." those are things you need to explain a little further. What will happen if the mosque is built? What about freedom of religion?**