Conor+Kelly

10/7/10

The article was about a bright young student at a college in Autstin who took an assult riffle and started spraying the gun near the campus, and after he was done shooting, he shot himself. My reaction is that it is always the quiet ones who seem like there is nothing wrong with them. They always have all of this anger built up inside of them and no on ever asks them what is wrong and they always assume he is fine. Maybe something happened to him that he couldnt handle. It isn;t suprising hearing about this because it happens all the time. It is just sad that this happens, but we are lucky no one got hurt. It is hard to resonate why someone with such a bright future would just end his life like this.


 * You did a nice job of starting off your paragraph different than "My reaction." Now, start telling us what happened as if it were a newscast. Do they say "This story is about" or do they just tell you the story? I commend you for using "resonate" in your paragraph.**

9/23/10

My reaction to the Tehran article was that you should never go hiking in Iraq. If you stumble upon the bored of Iraq and Iran and are charged for being a spy, that is both bad luck, and unaweness of your surrounding. The Iranians freed one woman who has a lump in her breast and most likely cancer. The other two supposed spies need a 500,000$ bail to get out. I think that this is outrageous and the U.S Military needs to go into Iran and save these people. It isn't fair that they should have to stay there because we are on bad terms with Iran.


 * P= You gave a strong amount of detail to show your understanding of the article.**
 * C=Try starting your paragraph as if you were starting a conversation. Instead of saying "my reaction" tell us what happened and then just tell us what you feel about it.**