Hadley+Jones

Hadley Jones Period 5/6 US History II =//The main stories...//= November 7, 2010 *i was absent the week of the assignment The Iraq war, as revealed by WikiLeaks: WikiLeaks released a trove of almost 400,000 classified military documents from the Iraq war making this leak of secret information the largest in U.S. history. According to Pentagon Press Secretary Geoff Morrell this leak of classified information is "shameful" and "could potentially undermine our nation' security". The Washington Post stated this document release was "reckless and politically motivated." These surreptious documents should not have been unsecure and in reach of WikiLeaks. America's security is now in jeopardy due to this unfortunate decision. According to The New York Times the newspapers too great care to edit or withhold any documents that might "put lives in danger or jeopardize continuing military operations. I think they should have just not released anything about the whole incident so no more attention would be drawn to WikiLeaks. =//The U.S. at a glance...//= October 11, 2010 Student Goes on Shooting Spree: Students should be closley monitored at every school because no student can go through promblems like Colton Tooley must have gone through and have no one notice. It is inane that no one even tried to help the kid through his problems. People generally mistake the smart students for people without problems and drama because all they have time for in school, but in reality everybody has problems. He was most likely going through a very tough and stressful period of his life and although what he did was a bit drastic no one will ever really know why he did it because no one bothered to ask while he was alive.

=//The world at a glance...//= September 27, 2010 In Belgium it was found that church workers and priests had "repeatedly raped and molested" children from every single Catholic parish in the country throughout the 1950s to the 1980s. According to the article there were 13 suicides resulting from this mass rape. I was shocked that anyone, especially a priest or priests, would ever even imagine the idea of a mass rape in every Catholic Parish in the country. I am extremely disappointed in the legal action that has not been taken.
 * You would do well to re-read your paragraphs. You will come across the sentences that don't seem to flow/make sense. Check out the sentence that starts with "people generally..." Try giving us a summary of what happened and then reacting to that. It gives your paragraph more flow.**
 * Brussels-** //Pervasive Catholic Abuse://
 * yes, i understand this assignment is late ):

=//**The U.S. at a glance...**//= September 15, 2010 Thomas Magill, 22, made a suicidal attempt of jumping of a forty-story building. He ended up surviving the crash by landing on Maria McCormak's Dodge Charger. I was amazed at the intensity of his suicidal attempt. He jumped off a forty-story building and survived, that is absolutley insane. I'm not sure I could ever recover from a jump like that, not only physically, but emotionally as well. I am sure he will be scarred for the rest of his life. I am not sure I can call his amazing landing lucky because he does not want to live so he will have to stay here alive when he does not want to.
 * New York City-** //Miracle Landing://

P= Great use of detail in the beginning! C= Try giving your opinion without saying I. You are the one writing it, so "I" is understood.