Josh+McNamara

AUSTIN josh mcnamara 10/7/10

how do these kids keep getting guns and shoot at church. but at least no one was hurt besides colton tooley who held up in a library and the killed him self as police arrived. but how can person described as brilliant buy and ak and then go back to campus and decide to fire the gun in the air and towards a church what i think is he prob took acid or something and went all crazy but thats just a theory but i will never get what drives a kid to go on a shooting spree and kill people.


 * Capitalization, spelling need to improve. Try to break up the sentences. Still using run-ons.**

Josh McNamara 9/15/10

I think that terry johns pastor of the the evangelica dove outreach center idea of burning the koran will cause many problems in the middel east for exsample if he burns it he will indanger troops there and anger the muslims in the middel east and here in are own country. He thinks that burning the koran will send a clear message to the radical elements of the islam people.

P= You have some good arguments but.. C= Expand on them! Also, your first sentence is one long run-on. Break it up!