jacob+kennedy

NEW YORK CITY MIRICLE LANDING! 9/15/10

So apperantly a suicidal 22 year old man jumped of a 40-story building, and instead of hearing a splat you hear a smash as a charger breaks his fall. He was surprisingly still alive, and no offese but if i survived a fall from a 40-story building only to find myself being yelled at because of some lady's car i might be suicidal myself. Is he superman, no hes just an average guy who some how survived with only two broken legs and shattered ankles, so why would you ask him if he feels like an idiot, he failed at what should've been one of the simpilist of task. All he thought he had to do was take a step forward, but he should of looked before jumping. Now he's in the hospital, and owes Mrs. Maria McCormack $14,000. So seriously is anyone trying to get this guy help?

P= You have a good conversational tone in your writing. C= Spell check! Capitalize the letter "I." You put a lot of commas... make sure you are using them correctly. Here, you are just making run-on sentences.


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